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1、Stepping Out of my Comfort Zone

（by Samuel）

If you told me I would be playing a sport called squash at 11 years old, I would call you crazy. But in seventh grade, I was at a new school 10 times bigger than my last one. I felt like a little fish in a big pond. I was quiet, withdrawn, and very introverted. A lot of the time, I stayed where I was comfortable.

During the first week of school, a group of people visited the school and they introduced themselves as Squashbusters. At that time, I’d only heard of Squash once before, but I didn’t really know what it was. Because the program combined the sport of squash with academic support, mentoring, and service opportunities, I decided to sign up. It’s been six years and this program has made a monumental difference in my life.

Being a part of SquashBusters is a program that really pushed me out of my shell to the point where I’ve grown accustomed to challenging myself. In SquashBusters, they tell us to push ourselves past our limits on the squash courts, but that mindset has transferred to other areas of my life as well. From team trips and tournaments to cringy karaoke moments and participating in eccentric traditions like our annual SquashBusters Olympics, my comfort zone has steadily grown larger. My peers brought out a side of me I didn’t even know existed. I haven’t transformed completely from introvert to extrovert, but I’ve become more social as the years go by.

At Hopkins, I want to do something similar. I want to try new things and embrace the campus traditions. Even though I will develop intellectually from the many academic classes and clubs/activities offered on campus, I feel as though a true community is birthed from exploring beyond what one’s used to. From traditions like Blue Jay Opening Day and the Spring Fair to the many world-changing clubs like the Amnesty International club and the Foreign Affairs Symposium, the different ways to be involved in the Hopkins community is limitless and invigorating and I can’t wait to be a part of the Hopkins family.

招生官點評：Samuel的文章是對自己走出舒適區的反思，這不僅是重要的人生課程，也是JHU學生每天都在做的事情。我們的學生突破發現的界限，在課堂內外面臨挑戰，并追求新發現的激情。通過逐漸習慣于挑戰自己，Samuel體現了這些特征，并且能夠將他在壁球場上學到的經驗應用到他生活的其他領域。他表明，如果有機會，鑒于各種學術和課外機會，他將在我們的校園里蓬勃發展，并且他具備克服所面臨的任何挑戰的實力。

Samuel（波士頓）自述：我對目前正在寫論文的學生的建議是要記住，初稿很少會寫得很好，所以即使難以理解，也要盡可能多地寫。還要給自己很多時間來接受來自同齡人、老師甚至是自己的修改。

2、Left and Right Don't Exist

（by Stella）

The first lesson I learned as a student pilot is that left and right don’t exist. Maybe driving on a highway or in a parking lot, left and right is precise enough to describe the location and movements of slow-moving bikers, pedestrians, and cars. But at 36,000 feet in the air in a steel tube hurdling almost 200 miles an hour? Left and right just don’t cut it.

During one of my first flights in a small Cessna-182, my flight instructor ordered me to scan the horizon for approaching aircrafts. To my right, I caught a glimpse of one: another Cessna with maroon stripes, the sun’s reflection glinting off its windows. Gesturing vaguely to my two o’clock, I informed my flying instructor, “There’s a plane to the right.”

“No, to your right. From his position, what direction does he see you?” From his angle, I was to his left. In that moment, I realized that perspective and precision of language is everything. The radio chirped: “Cessna One-Eight-Two Sandra, heading north to John Wayne Airport. Over.”

I navigate using my compass’s north, east, south, and west directions because every pilot’s vantage point differs from each other both vertically and horizontally, creating opposite perspectives. My right was that pilot’s left.

Through flying, I began to consider all points of view, regardless of my personal perspective.

Perhaps it was my ability to scan the horizon to communicate a single story, uniting contrasting outlooks, that drew me to my love for journalism and the diverse melting pot that was my community.

To me, journalism modernizes the ancient power of storytelling, filled with imperfect characters and intricate conflicts to which I am the narrator. As editor-in-chief for my school newspaper, The Wildcat’s Tale, I aim to share the uncensored perspective of all students and encourage my editorial groups to talk — and listen — to those with whom they disagree. Starting each newspaper edition with a socratic, round-table discussion, I ask the other journalists to pursue stories that answer the questions: why did this happen and where will it lead?

Expanding beyond the perspectives of my classmates, I began writing articles for the Korea Daily, and later, the Los Angeles Times High School Insider. I schedule interviews with city council candidates, young and old voters, and mayors of my town, obtaining quotes and anecdotes to weave into my writing. My interviews with both Democratic and Republican voters have taught me to thoroughly report polarizing-opposite opinions through an unbiased lens. As a journalist, I realized I cannot presume the opinions of the reader, but instead simply provide them with the tools necessary to formulate their own conclusions.

However, differences in perspective in my articles are not solely limited to politics. I found that in my suburban community, people love to read about the small-town hospitality of their own friends and neighbors. Quirky traditions, like our Fourth of July carnival clown and local elementary school’s Thanksgiving talent show, are equally as important to me as national headlines are. My favorite stories to publish are the ones taped onto fridges, proudly framed on the mom-and-pop downtown diner, or pinned into the corkboard in my teacher’s classroom. I discovered the size of my story does not matter, but the impact I leave on the reader does.

In my time as both a student pilot and journalist, I grew to love these stories, the ones that showed me that living life with blinders, can not only be boring, but dangerous. Whether I was 36,000 feet in the air or on ground level, by flying and writing, I realized that the most interesting stories of life come straight from the people most different from me.

招生官點評：Stella在這篇文章的開頭討論了她學習飛行的經驗。然而，這則軼事并不是關于行為本身的，因為這是她從經驗中學到的視角和觀點。然后，她能夠將這些收獲與她生活的另一個方面聯系起來——她對新聞的熱愛。隨著她與新聞界分享更多關于她的方法和影響的信息，她明確表示，飛行的經驗教訓永遠存在于她的工作中。從在報紙編輯室聽取他人的想法和觀點，到從平衡和深思熟慮的角度看故事，我們能夠了解到她如何處理自己的激情，以及她的社區。這篇文章能夠通過與我們分享一些新的激情和擴大她的一些影響來提升整個申請，但其主要重點是她如何能夠將一次經驗教訓應用到生活的其他方面。當我們思考Stella將成為我們社區的什么樣的成員時，這篇文章幫助我們理解她將是一個愿意傾聽、學習、應用這些知識并產生影響的人。

Stella（洛杉磯）自述：我選擇寫我最喜歡的兩個愛好，飛行和寫作，因為我知道我可以最誠實地寫我喜歡做的事情。這篇文章記錄了我對看似日常任務和情況的思考過程和創造性方法，這是簡歷中無法列出的。我沒有寫我認為霍普金斯大學的招生團隊會留下深刻印象的東西，而是學會了專注于寫一篇能抓住我個性的文章。在保持專業的同時用我自然的對話聲音寫作是一項挑戰，但也是有益的。

3、Queen's Gambit

（by Dante）

No, Dante. Stop, think, and look at the entire board.

I was thoroughly confused. I thought I had procured the complete solution to this elaborate chess puzzle. What am I missing? A knight fork, a bishop move? Am I in check? After a quick glance at the left side of the board, I slapped my hand on my head as I suddenly realized what my chess coach was telling me. My queen was sitting unused, positioned all the way on the other side of the board, and I had no idea. If I were to sacrifice my queen, the opposing rook would be forced to capture it, allowing me to finish the game in style with the illustrious “smothered mate.”

If you begin to look at the whole chessboard, then these puzzles will become a breeze for you.

Ever since that chess lesson, those words have stuck. Indeed, my chess skills improved swiftly as my rating flew over the 1000 Elo threshold in a matter of months. However, those words did not merely pertain to chess. Looking at the whole picture became a foundational skill that I have utilized throughout my life in school and other endeavors. I particularly remember making use of it on the soccer field.

Now, I’m no Arnold Schwarzenegger. Weighing in at a monstrous 125 pounds and standing 5 foot 8 inches, my opponents made it a habit to tackle me to the ground. Once again, I found myself face to face with the defender, and before I knew it, I crumbled to the ground, left isolated and dispossessed. Laying dazed on the pitch, my mind flashed back to the chessboard. It occurred to me that soccer, much like chess, relies on the proper position of the many pieces that combine to create a finished strategy. The “whole picture” of soccer is not just how fast or strong one is or how many tackles you put in; that is only one element of the puzzle. The intelligence and creativity needed in a playmaker is also an essential part of a well-rounded soccer team. I realized that my most significant advantage would always be my in-depth understanding of the game of soccer—where to pass the ball, when to make a run, if the ball should be in the air or driven. I picked myself off the ground, and when that same defender came barreling towards me again, I was zoned in, oblivious to the noise around me. I chipped the ball into the open space right behind him, knowing my teammate would run into the space without even looking. From then on, I continued to hone my skills through intense practice to become the best playmaker I could be, working in conjunction with my faster and stronger teammates to become a well-balanced, unified team.

Through chess and soccer, I have discovered that every piece in a puzzle has a purpose. This new perspective has enhanced my ability to stop, stand back, and analyze the whole picture in the many dimensions of my life. In my scientific studies, it was not enough to examine just one C. reinhardtii cell, but it was necessary to zoom out the microscope to capture all of the thousand cells to truly understand quorum sensing and its consequences. In my studies of music, it was not enough to listen to the melody of the finale of Beethoven’s 9th symphony, but one must realize that the true beauty of the composition lies in the whole orchestra handing off this simple melody to every instrument. All these facets—music, research, soccer, chess—are not only completed puzzles but also parts of a greater whole: my life. Every aspect of myself matters as much as the other. As high school comes to an end, the pieces on my board are set, and I only have success in mind.

Your move.

招生官點評：Dante的這篇文章向讀者清楚地表明，他非常好奇，并通過展示而非講述來表達自己的興趣。他深思熟慮地將他從國際象棋中學到的經驗教訓與他在足球場上的表現聯系起來，并很好地專注于他所學到的東西，而不是對整個國際象棋比賽或足球比賽逐一復述。讀者還可以看到Dante可以將他在一門學科中學到的知識應用到另一門學科中，這對于在霍普金斯大學取得學業成功至關重要。我們的招生委員會可以閱讀這篇文章，并找到明確的證據表明Dante的思維方式將幫助他在我們的跨學科課程中茁壯成長。

Dante（佛羅里達州）自述：在整個大學申請過程中，“整體形象”始終是一個重點。我從字面上接受了這個建議。我[用這篇文章]作為一種將我的申請中的所有內容聯系在一起的方式，給所有內容一個更有意義的目的，而不僅僅是一份課外活動的清單。我想讓委員會知道我所做的一切不僅僅是為了填寫簡歷，而是我想向他們展示我所做的一切都是有意義的，并且是全神貫注和努力完成的，以便讓自己變得更好。

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